I think maybe drop the circle behind the logo and it’ll update it instantly. The gradient and the style of that circle behind just date it too much.
I know its hard though with getting the “logo” to stand out which is what I tired to do in my mock mid last year:
I do love what you have done with the dots to create a kind of globe behind the 9 logo and on the backdrop though.
I’d prefer it if the text was a little bit bigger - it would be hard to read sitting across the lounge, especially the lower captions. Otherwise, waaaaaaaaaaaaaay better than what’s on TV now!
I have done a mock related to Nine’s television division, ahead of Nine’s relaunch, with a background similar to the 9Now app. It includes Nine’s free-to-air channels and 9Now’s FAST channels, Pedestrian Television and Seinfeld 24/7. The mock has logos that are all flat, except for 9GemHD, which has a glossy logo, because I could not find a flat logo for that channel.
I have considered your steps and revised my Nine mock. I have considered the safe areas by re-adjusting the icons, and by removing the HD and FAST channels.
Nice work, looks good. Definitely some improvement there.
Only other things I would say is to balance it out the Nine logo needs to come down a bit, and not sure I’m a fan of how the logos gradually get small left to right.
I revised my mock, by adding Nine’s slogan, removing Nine’s corporate logo, grouping the Nine logo with the 9Now logo, and took inspiration from your mock, by making the multi-channels’ (9Gem, 9Go!, 9Life, Extra and 9Rush) a bit bigger with a white rectangle, and added colours back in to the logos. Thanks Michael Power for your ideas. I have kept the Extra channel, despite Nine most likely not promoting it.
This is my second-last iteration of my Nine mock design. I adjusted the sizes of the multi-channels’ logos (Extra, 9Gem, 9Go!, 9Life & 9Rush), made the This is the Nine Network - Still the One text a bit smaller, and added the Extra logo to the first line of the rectangle.
Off-topic: Once again, here is my Canva design link, if you would like to tweak my design, see my Seven Network mock in a similar style, or if you just cannot see the above image. (No major changes, just minor tweaks) 7 + Nine channels mock - Canva