The thing that is jarring me the most (apart from the lack of headlines and terrible set and backdrop) is the script writing.
When you watch the Sydney bulletin the script has a very story telling vibe about it, it flows. It sounds natural. They are well written words. It gives an air of gravitas and importance as well as the facts.
Vanessa says Good Evening then boom
Right into the facts. The camera shot is locked and there is no introduction to the story - just right to cold facts. It feels cold abbrubt and awkward.
They need to start with a wider shot of the set. And Vanessa needs wor warmly welcome people. Then some introduction to the story. Make an emotional connection. Get me vested In the story.
Good Evening. NSW has recorded the highest day of average temperatures across the state today with 29 blazes burning. And people have been evacuating their homes. Chris evens has this report,
What it should be.
Good Evening. If you struggled getting to sleep last night with the heat, you had good reason. Todsy marked the highest average tempreture across NSW since record have been kept. That's 111 years. And there seems to h no relief in sight. This graphic shows where the fires are burning and you can see almost no corner of the state is spared. And to add insult To ingury - tens of thousands of homes across southern NSW and the ACT are today without power as electricity grids failed. Chris Evens has our report.